BG5 Revision

I had some extra time this the day I wrote this post and I wrote what I meant to convey in English on my Lang-8 post. While most of my corrections were the usual tense and particle corrections, writing in English helped a lot in the sentences where I was using words I had never used before. Often when trying to translate an English word one end's up with a Japanese word that has a similar meaning but that isn't quite right. Here mentioning the English word or phrase I was trying to express was very helpful in revising this post.